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BeoWulf

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Hey guys been a while, my pc was kinda dead for most of Rammadan, and it costs an arm and a leg to fix it over here :D .

Anyway wanted to drop by and say Eid Mubarak to you all, i hope you all had fun with family and friends alike.
It was nice over here in wales but it still didn't feel much like a special day except for one moment i would like to share with ya.

I was walking near an old section of town not too far from the University, when i started hearing the crisp yet pleasant sound of a piano playing somewhere nearby. It was raining and it felt great to hear something that altered the gray mood most towns in the UK seemed to turn into during bad weather. Finally reaching the place where the music came from i saw a small type of housing complex called "Martyrs Reach". It was a place which seemed to have gotten more vibrant with age. Its tiled corners and wooden casings seemed to be singing along with the melody emanating inside. I wanted to know more about this place so i decided to move to a higher position. From the overpass i was now perched on I could see inside one of the grand linen lined windows. The image was clearer now. There were many people scattered across the room. Some on chairs and others on couches, but most were older than others and the way they were clustered suggested different families. And yet most still seemed older than 60 years of age. It may have been a form of retirement home which was not uncommon for this part of town. I shifted once or twice to try and get a view of the person playing the piano for these obviously entranced people. But still all I could make out were the dainty pink hued hands that seemed to glide across the keys like a pair of white mice. I was getting cold and wetter still, but neither could I move. My only desire was to hear the song that seemed to stop the rain that was pouring inside of me. And yet when it ended so did the warmth my spirit was now addicted to. I hurried to see who could move such a crowd wearied by life and time into passive submission. But all I would ever witness were her hands which seemed to fade away far beyond my ever growing curiosity. I hurried down to street level trying to glance by chance which way she would exit from. turning a corner i could hear many footsteps getting into various cars accompanied by the very familiar sound of shutting doors. I was too late, there was no way of telling who she was or which family she was with. left wet and sneezing i made my way back through town. Cutting through an abandoned playground i caught something move at the corner of my eye. To my surprise there was a girl standing on top of one of the grassy knolls. She was silently turning and swaying whilst looking up at the tear ridden sky. In her eyes i saw the echoes of dedicated passion brimming through. Her fluid motion seeming to be in tune to some invisible sonata. For some reason a few people passing by found the girls actions ridiculous so they started laughing as they walked away. Yet she payed them no attention, she was in a world of her own. One which i for some reason yearned to be let into. And then as if granted by some divine force i could hear it! The same song i heard a few minutes ago! But there was no piano in sight, it was suddenly playing in my head! Louder than any sound known to man. Her movement was starting to make sense, her every twist and her every turn was in complete unity with the song i was hearing. Her body was the canvas in which the paint in my ears could find no home. For the love of all creation! i was witnessing true poetry in motion for the first time!

The Silent Song

Tethered hearts of rising mist
Call the one forever missed
To feel the hand upon my head
To lift the life i had been fed

The wonder, the show, the chilling scene
The bliss, the kiss, the lonely queen
Ballad and body, kindred once more
Poison and Cure given to four

The flickering sight no longer here
The divine voice no longer near
The herbal scent no longer clear
The piercing touch no longer dear

Peering through the gaping hole
Dangling dreams did take their tole
Joy and pain whom brothers to soul
Did play and trick and plan their role

Within the snow lay her chains
Within the sleet lay her pains
Within the stone lay her pride
Within the flesh lay her guide

A Rift so close yet eons away
I stand by her from day to day
Time did halt her hallowed dance
A shifting world a distant trance

Alone i wait the coming rhyme
Alone i seek the blessed chime
Alone i sense the silent song

The song she sings for me alone



 
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Not a single comment? good? bad? am completely open to criticisim you know...

Come on Pesmerga you always gave me feedback, what happened.

And if people need it translated then am gonna need some help, no arabic on this keyboard and i was never good at translating literature anyway.

Untill someone replies am just gonna inoccently assume it was soooo good, you were all shocked by its beauty and fell into a form of depression thats left your minds empty! xD
 
Hey guys been a while, my pc was kinda dead for most of Rammadan, and it costs an arm and a leg to fix it over here .

لول ليش يا راجل واحنا وين صيرنا المسألة كنا نحلهالك وكانت ما راح تكلف الا عينك فقط

بس وش هذي الخاطرة الصاروخية !!!

الخاطرة طبعا ما تنفع ميتال هذه المرة XD بس هل القصة هذي فعلا حصلت لك ؟ يعني انت ساريدها بشكل غير معقول واللحن الي سمعته والفتاة الي تدندن والناس الي شافوها اللا مبالين (أعرف الانجليز باردين جدا :D )
على اي حال فعلا ممتاز الخاطرة وعندي سؤال ... أنت بتدرس آداب انجليزي هناك ؟ :D
Come on Pesmerga you always gave me feedback, what happened.

راح يثري الموضوع بالظلام فعلا XD
 
لول ليش يا راجل واحنا وين صيرنا المسألة كنا نحلهالك وكانت ما راح تكلف الا عينك فقط

If i could have i would have given you both my eyes, and not pay the price they rip off people here xD

بس وش هذي الخاطرة الصاروخية !!!

الخاطرة طبعا ما تنفع ميتال هذه المرة XD بس هل القصة هذي فعلا حصلت لك ؟ يعني انت ساريدها بشكل غير معقول واللحن الي سمعته والفتاة الي تدندن والناس الي شافوها اللا مبالين (أعرف الانجليز باردين جدا :D )

Well to tell you the truth, yes it did happen but it was all within a time frame of 2 days,i came around the first day and heard the music. And the second day was where i saw her at the playground. The laughing people were real "they were making fun of her" because they obviously thought she was drunk or wierd. This is Wales not england they are a lot more emotional than the english over here. xD


على اي حال فعلا ممتاز الخاطرة وعندي سؤال ... أنت بتدرس آداب انجليزي هناك ؟ :D

Thank you for your comment, and yes it is part of my major but am not currently taking any courses involving it, i have also studied it in the past during high school.

راح يثري الموضوع بالظلام فعلا XD

Hehe ya i keep telling him to lighten up! xD
 
Before I tell u what I think of what you wrote I am going to be honest with ya! I thought this was completely made up I was like damn! What is the guy studying there? Romantic Literature??? Then when I read your third reply and knew it was real, I was shocked to say the least. I mean wow, well what do you expect me to say? Sure I could see that you were moved by this girl's art and the way she played the piano, but seriously this felt like it was a scene from a movie or something, what I mean is the way you describe the whole situation seems far beyond admiration and the poem was to say the least amazing.

But going back to the whole scene, I love how you described the whole scene and I felt honesty in the way you described your emotions but then I thought wait a sec...Thats not the Beowolf I know! But then I started thinking again, and came up with the conclusion that this is a side of you I have yet to see or is it?

Anyway I really thought the whole thing was well written and I noticed that you were really expressive and I loved how you described how the surroundings went well with the song( quick quote "Its tiled corners and wooden casings seemed to be singing along with the melody emanating inside" unquote ) but the song was probably really good to make you want to stay under the rain and listen to it while your freaking freezing. I just hope you didn't catch a cold or anything.

Overall you have improved (thats what I think anyway) keep in mind I am no hot shot critic or reviewer (you should see me criticize or review animes, wait I think u did lol) but to tell ya the truth it did feel like you were not trying to be overly descriptive and I understand that since you wanted to keep it short and sweet or maybe I am just used to long stories or I am still effected by the last story you let me read (I'll tell u later which story you let me read) Anywayz I hope to see more of your work and just like I am telling you what I think of your writing I want you to read mine when you have the time and be very honest with me when it comes to what you think about it.

All thats left to say is take care and buy a freaking umbrella.​
 
wow man u left me speechless after reading it, it's look like i'm reading a story and the part when the girl were swinging and singing carefree about the ppl around her, that gave me the impression of the old classic amazing stories, keep going with this great work, i really like it


All thats left to say is take care and buy a freaking umbrella.​

erm..... hes a guy :G
 
Thx for the input guys, i was heading for a slightly more different approach this time. my next one is going to be very different as well. am trying to mix and match different styles and moods together whilst keeping it on a level everyone can relate to.

And yes pesmerga i know which one your talking about. ~_^
yes am experimenting with different types of writing atm so as not to fall into a slump of the same type of style. And ya i do have many styles and as i stated earlier the incident was a factual one and yet i do add some sugar and spice here and there that i saw with my mind. i guess the best part of writing about facts is that its there and you let your imagination do the rest. i just think that you would find that much inspiration back home i guess. anyway thx again for your opinion guys, am anxious to read your new stuff pesmerga. :)
 
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